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These are a Few Clauses that I wrote. Please suggest any corrections Charlie Carissimo © P.S. yes I have copyrighted them! Thankyou Lorenzo, They sound much better now

EDIT by Lorenzo: I have changed the wording (I don't know, I think I am monopolizing your clauses : but I have not changed the content of the clauses (I think). Here would be "my version", take what you need:



This is one clause that I wrote. Please suggest me any corrections, Eleonora

Costa Rica recognizes that women play a major role in the political and social decisions of the country however it urges to maintain and promote equal opportunities on a global level, especially to be given the right to participate in: a. conflict resolution, b. peace negotiations, c. peace building, d. investing in policies and programs to encourage women’s leadership capacity;

I am not very expert, but I don't know if you should mention COSTA RICA in you clause.Charlie

EDIT by Lorenzo: Here are some corrections and suggestions: 1. You got the format wrong. Look at other examples of clauses (I know my resolution has the right format) or read the page called "Writing a resolution" to understand what I mean. 2. This is not a clause, it is a position paper, a statement of intent. A clause either clarifies the problem (in which case it's a preambulatory clause), or it suggests one (ONE) solution. A resolution is what provides the entire range of possible solutions. See below. 3. You must remember that this is going to become a part of a resolution which will a) possibly have 10 or more clauses and b) be written by someone else. This means that all the more obvious things will already be mentioned (though you can be surprised, sometimes) and that your clause is an ADDITION to that resolution. 4. A resolution has to read like a) a very long sentence spanning several pages and b) a statement from the entire international community. This means that Costa Rica's opinion on the matter REALLY shouldn't be there. I am sorry if it sounds like I am bashing you. It seems as if you are not very clear on what a clause should look like or what it should contain. Read sample resolutions (like mine, or the sample resolution in the gemun handbook), I'll email you a guide on how to become prepared for MUNs. PS: b) and c) look really similar.

Human Rights - The tension between freedom of expression and freedom of religion
//by Riccardo//

Calls Upon the government of all member states to join in an attempt to provide freedom of religion, and other laws and policies contributed to the generally free practice of religion. However, the constitution desegnate Eastern Orthodox Christianity as the"traditional" religion, depriving it from having to register in court as required for all other religious groups. The Bulgarian delegation aspires and invite the other countries to allow the freedom of women inside the governament. As Bulgaria plays an enourmeous role for the roma people, the current delegation of Bulgaria accepts the actual circumstances of the EU commeete which agree that the inclusion of Roma is a priority for the EU and needs the commitment and joint efforts of national and local authorities, civil society and EU institutions. The European Commission is committed to taking the necessary steps to improve the situation of Roma people and their social and economic integration in society.